tarotgal

Yeah, I'd imagine that it's a lot more confusing if you're not familiar with the fandom. (The show's on Cartoon Network at midnight M-Th)
I'm glad you liked it *G* Awesome. I can live with awesome. heehee
The only thing I was worried about dialogue-wise is that in the show the characters don't speak much to each other unless they're on a mission, and then it's case-related. There's very little personal anything shared among characters... and the stuff that is is short but very revealing. So I sort of felt like my dialogue was too much and too light at times, compared to the rest of the fandom.
In general, though, I agree. I enjoy dialogue much more than exposition or too much description or contemplation. But here I was trying to make it feel more like the series, and I'm glad the description of the illness fit in so well heehee :-) Thanks for reading it! :-)