Q/O Drabble
Nov. 20th, 2003 06:27 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
tarotgalI keep getting stuck in stories... well... not so much stuck as knowing the words but not being able to get them out of my head or feeling quite up to the challenge to do so. Thus, technically, stuckage.
So I thought I'd try a few drabbles... wrote a few Harry Potter ones... then this one (which was the only one in the bunch with sneezing, and the only one that even remotely makes sense). It's rated PG for kissing but, er, perhaps should be rated higher for its implications.
250 word Qui-Gon/Obi-Wan Drabble:
Qui-Gon exhales, then takes a deeper breath in, sniffing hard. “No, I most certainly do not have a cold, Padawan,” he says sternly but unconvincingly and swings an arm to shake Obi-Wan off.
Obi-Wan, hand outstretched to feel for fever, pulls back and circles around to put the desk between them. Obi-Wan sighs. He leans forward, elbows on the the desk, chin resting on top of folded hands. He blinks once… twice… “It’s only a bit of a tickle,” Qui-Gon says. It is clear he hides something and Obi-Wan’s suspicious expression remains fixed. “Can’t I just sneeze a few times for no particular reason?”
A thin smile curves Obi-Wan’s lips. “You are Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn,” he says. His smile becomes a grin that fills his whole face, making him practically glow. “Everything you do has reason.”
Quin-Gon’s face twitches around his nose. For a moment he means to reply. But his words are lost to him by the racing of halting breaths. His eyes shut, mouth frowns, brow furrows, body tenses. He snaps forward, the sneeze uncovered, unrestrained, unapologetic. “hehhkkTchahhhhh!” He freezes, savoring the moment, then relaxes in his seat. Smiling, he rubs a bent finger beneath his nose. He sniffs again and lets the breath out with great satisfaction that seems to coarse warmly through his entire body.
“My apologies, Master,” Obi-Wan says, lifting his head. “Not even you could sneeze with such pleasure and relief while sick.” And he bends forward, lips grazing over Qui-Gon’s.
So I thought I'd try a few drabbles... wrote a few Harry Potter ones... then this one (which was the only one in the bunch with sneezing, and the only one that even remotely makes sense). It's rated PG for kissing but, er, perhaps should be rated higher for its implications.
250 word Qui-Gon/Obi-Wan Drabble:
Qui-Gon exhales, then takes a deeper breath in, sniffing hard. “No, I most certainly do not have a cold, Padawan,” he says sternly but unconvincingly and swings an arm to shake Obi-Wan off.
Obi-Wan, hand outstretched to feel for fever, pulls back and circles around to put the desk between them. Obi-Wan sighs. He leans forward, elbows on the the desk, chin resting on top of folded hands. He blinks once… twice… “It’s only a bit of a tickle,” Qui-Gon says. It is clear he hides something and Obi-Wan’s suspicious expression remains fixed. “Can’t I just sneeze a few times for no particular reason?”
A thin smile curves Obi-Wan’s lips. “You are Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn,” he says. His smile becomes a grin that fills his whole face, making him practically glow. “Everything you do has reason.”
Quin-Gon’s face twitches around his nose. For a moment he means to reply. But his words are lost to him by the racing of halting breaths. His eyes shut, mouth frowns, brow furrows, body tenses. He snaps forward, the sneeze uncovered, unrestrained, unapologetic. “hehhkkTchahhhhh!” He freezes, savoring the moment, then relaxes in his seat. Smiling, he rubs a bent finger beneath his nose. He sniffs again and lets the breath out with great satisfaction that seems to coarse warmly through his entire body.
“My apologies, Master,” Obi-Wan says, lifting his head. “Not even you could sneeze with such pleasure and relief while sick.” And he bends forward, lips grazing over Qui-Gon’s.
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Date: 2003-11-20 02:38 pm (UTC)“Not even you could sneeze with such pleasure and relief while sick.” And he bends forward, lips grazing over Qui-Gon’s.
Love this. Just the way it is. :)
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Date: 2003-11-20 11:47 pm (UTC)Though I must admit, I'm one of those people who can never get too much sweetness. I'd eat dessert all the time if I could :-) But I do adore drabbles... I'm just never very good at them at all. I like rambling on and on... not watching the number of words it takes to get the point across as briefly as possible. It's hard for me to get characterization and plot into drabbles properly... though a very well done one is a beauty to read. *sigh* I'll keep practicing :-)
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Date: 2003-11-20 04:50 pm (UTC)BVB
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Date: 2003-11-20 11:50 pm (UTC)I've never been at all good at writing them, so it's nice that I somewhat succeeded here. At least it's enjoyable to some rather than weird and confusing which most of my drabbles are.
And I wasn't sure that the orgasmic connotations made it through properly. That's the sort of thing I'd have spent many paragraphs on if I wasn't watching my word count.
Anyhoo, thanks! And you're right, they are a nice solution to cravings... though I wouldn't turn down a nice long fic, either! :-) But I can only blame my muses for that
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Date: 2003-11-21 02:45 am (UTC)A little OT, do you know when they start selling tickets for Return of the King?
Excellent!
~Annalisa
Re: ::guh::
Date: 2003-11-24 02:47 am (UTC)I loved those two parts as well... oohhh, especially the bent finger rubbing thing- that's an image I *love* and I think it fits him so well. I can just *see* Qui doing it... and such a perfect image with him in it... I ramble, many apologies :-)
I'm glad you liked! Course it's hard not to, with the boys and all, but is still nice to hear you liked! *G* Thanks much!